Cats vs Dogs
Today for writing we did persuasive writing on which we think is better "Cats or Dogs", I think this is a very interesting topic because to me cats and dogs are both my favorite.
But I came to my decision.
Here's my Persuasive writing.
I don't know about you but I think that dogs is an pretty amazing pet, because you can take them for walks, take a stroll and swim around at the beach, have play fights, have cuddles and many more things you can do that you can't exactly do with a cat. For e.g most of the things you can do with cats are ( Take them for walks, swim around with them, run around, take them to the park ) There are so many other things I could say but I prefer not to.
Let's take the example of taking your dog for a stroll on the beach.
Do you love just having a nice relaxing day on the beach but miss your cat or a different pet, but you just can't bring them cause there either, 1- scared of water 2- can't go to the beach or 3- hate car rides.
Well the most perfect pet for that is your dog, they are so much fun to play with at the beach, you can chuck around sticks in the water and let them chase it, you might even be able to have swimming races. It's easy for bringing a dog to the beach because, they LOVE car rides and having a cool fresh swim.
The reason why I know all this is because of personal experience, I have a dog at home that we take for rides and a swim at the beach and she loves it, she has so much fun, and your dog most probably to.
Hey Alyscia...
ReplyDeleteI can clearly see your point that dogs are the better pets. You definetly persuaded me by giving all the positive reasons why a dog is the better pet. I think that you gave alot of information on why you like them better. Keep up the good work.
Kia ora Alyscia
ReplyDeleteThis was a nice piece of writing about why dogs are the superior animal and you brought up some great points. My suggestion would be to make sure you are using as much formal language as possible. Your writing has a lot of your personal voice coming through, which is excellent, but make sure that it still has formal writing structures in place.
For example, "There are so many other things I could say but I prefer not to." I think by changing your word choice you could make this a more powerful sentence and have it sound less like a conversation!
Your writing is on the right track!
- Miss Birtch